Hi LittleBlueSkye ,
I know it's been a while since you posted the beginning your story, here, but I couldn't help stopping to say. well done! Your opening scene as a moive insert grabbed and held my attention, and I moved right on into the interplay between both Malcolm's thoughts and his interactions. You've peaked my interest!
I hope you have more fiction; I will have to check what else you've posted on site. In the meantime, perhaps you will consider writing more of this story. I'd like to find out more about Malcolm.
Good Luck your writing efforts.