Luvi Posted July 17, 2008 Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 I love my lips Though they lay a little too far below Where they used to be When they’re not pursed Into wrinkles That never desert me My eyes lay covered over by flaps of skin I can’t believe the shape I’m in My cheeks Sag And shake to and fro More than needs pinching And a bit too far below The sunny apples they used to be But it’s still little old me Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eddies23shoes Posted July 17, 2008 Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 (edited) I had something vaguely similar to this at one point. Where you really analyze your physical appearance and discover very strange little details. Nice. Your line breaks are nicely placed. I assume you're aware of the rhyme scheme? It'd be cool to see how you played with it more. :-) Edited July 17, 2008 by eddies23shoes Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luvi Posted July 17, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 Thanks Eddies! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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